Yea, you want an excerpt! One good thing about 2 snow days is that Rearview Mirror, the sequel to Move, has progressed by 4 chapters over 2 days. Wow! And it's progressing in ways that frankly, surprised even me. I've thrown in some elements that I didn't expect, like developing an interweaving culture of djinn and humans that I never even thought about when I originally started with this in writing Move. It's been a bit of a challenge, because Judeao-Christian culture doesn't believe in djinn. That's actually an Islamic belief, so I've really had to stretch and research to get my head around this. Truth is, I'm amazed at where this is going. But I'm pleased, and excited to see where these new unexpected elements lead.
This is why writing is so much fun. As you write, things unfold that even you don't expect. It really is a world taking on a life of it's own.
Anyway, now I'd like to share a bit of what I've written on my snow days. Here's an excerpt of Chapter 11. It's a high paced chase that ends with a bang - literally! Ruby has just found out that Bryce wasn't the only djinn she was bound to. In fact, she's been bound to three. That's right, that means that two other characters in Move were djinn. *Cue dramatic music here* So now you have more reason to go back and read it again. Who were they? It may be obvious - or not!
So without further ado, here's an except from my latest progress with Rearview Mirror:
Time passed. It might have been a little or a lot. She forgot her watch, and frankly she didn’t care. None of it mattered anymore. She ran through the woods, searching for a place where she could sort out the whirlwind in her mind.
“Ruby, where are you! Come back!”
She was working with Bryce. She called him here to me!
“It’s dangerous out here! Please, Ruby, come back and let’s fix this!”
She played me for five years.
“Ruby, please! I’m trying to help you! That’s all I ever tried to do!”
I don’t know what’s real anymore.
She forged ahead faster, propelled by their chasing voices. No, she wasn’t going back. Not now. She couldn’t believe it. Her whole life, since her mother died, had been a lie. Nothing had been real. It was all smoke and mirrors to make her believe she had a choice, when in fact she was being manipulated by everything around her.
I thought Simone turned on me first, but it turns out that Denise was playing me long before that. My best friend. The one person I trusted the most betrayed me the worst.
Ruby stopped dead in her tracks, not by the voices chasing her, but by her own thoughts.
If Denise called Bryce here to work on me, then how did Simone get tangled up with him?
She leaned against a tree, her mind swirling faster and faster.
Was he already here, or was he playing both sides against the middle?
“Ruby, please come back! It’s dangerous out here!”
Ruby grabbed the tree to steady herself as her heart raced and her breath came in fast gasps. She tried to slow her breathing. She didn’t want them to find her like this. She didn’t want them to find her at all; not now at least!
Which came first – Simone’s mistakes, or my own?
“Actually, it was a little bit of both,” a voice said behind Ruby.
She turned to see the figure of a person behind her, but she couldn’t make it out in the darkness. In fact, the figure itself seemed to be wrapped in black, and just barely formed a person. It reached out a hand.
“You both trusted the wrong people. But come to me, and let’s make it right.”
“Leave her alone!” Ruby heard Oliver shout behind the black form. It turned to face him.
“What do you know of this? You have no part in this matter! Leave us be!”
Oliver pulled a silver amulet out of his pocket and held it up, chanting in a strange tongue. The figure let out a shriek. Ruby trembled against the tree and put her hands against her ears, screaming against the painful whale of the figure as it expanded until it was mere dots exploding against the sky above them. Something fell from the explosion, hitting Ruby on the temple before bouncing on her foot. Oliver rushed forward, grabbing Ruby and pulling her away from the tree.
“Are you alright?” he asked, his hand probing the tender spot on her forehead where she was hit. “Are you hurt?”
“No, I’m fine,” Ruby said.
And then she fainted.
This is why writing is so much fun. As you write, things unfold that even you don't expect. It really is a world taking on a life of it's own.
Anyway, now I'd like to share a bit of what I've written on my snow days. Here's an excerpt of Chapter 11. It's a high paced chase that ends with a bang - literally! Ruby has just found out that Bryce wasn't the only djinn she was bound to. In fact, she's been bound to three. That's right, that means that two other characters in Move were djinn. *Cue dramatic music here* So now you have more reason to go back and read it again. Who were they? It may be obvious - or not!
So without further ado, here's an except from my latest progress with Rearview Mirror:
Time passed. It might have been a little or a lot. She forgot her watch, and frankly she didn’t care. None of it mattered anymore. She ran through the woods, searching for a place where she could sort out the whirlwind in her mind.
“Ruby, where are you! Come back!”
She was working with Bryce. She called him here to me!
“It’s dangerous out here! Please, Ruby, come back and let’s fix this!”
She played me for five years.
“Ruby, please! I’m trying to help you! That’s all I ever tried to do!”
I don’t know what’s real anymore.
She forged ahead faster, propelled by their chasing voices. No, she wasn’t going back. Not now. She couldn’t believe it. Her whole life, since her mother died, had been a lie. Nothing had been real. It was all smoke and mirrors to make her believe she had a choice, when in fact she was being manipulated by everything around her.
I thought Simone turned on me first, but it turns out that Denise was playing me long before that. My best friend. The one person I trusted the most betrayed me the worst.
Ruby stopped dead in her tracks, not by the voices chasing her, but by her own thoughts.
If Denise called Bryce here to work on me, then how did Simone get tangled up with him?
She leaned against a tree, her mind swirling faster and faster.
Was he already here, or was he playing both sides against the middle?
“Ruby, please come back! It’s dangerous out here!”
Ruby grabbed the tree to steady herself as her heart raced and her breath came in fast gasps. She tried to slow her breathing. She didn’t want them to find her like this. She didn’t want them to find her at all; not now at least!
Which came first – Simone’s mistakes, or my own?
“Actually, it was a little bit of both,” a voice said behind Ruby.
She turned to see the figure of a person behind her, but she couldn’t make it out in the darkness. In fact, the figure itself seemed to be wrapped in black, and just barely formed a person. It reached out a hand.
“You both trusted the wrong people. But come to me, and let’s make it right.”
“Leave her alone!” Ruby heard Oliver shout behind the black form. It turned to face him.
“What do you know of this? You have no part in this matter! Leave us be!”
Oliver pulled a silver amulet out of his pocket and held it up, chanting in a strange tongue. The figure let out a shriek. Ruby trembled against the tree and put her hands against her ears, screaming against the painful whale of the figure as it expanded until it was mere dots exploding against the sky above them. Something fell from the explosion, hitting Ruby on the temple before bouncing on her foot. Oliver rushed forward, grabbing Ruby and pulling her away from the tree.
“Are you alright?” he asked, his hand probing the tender spot on her forehead where she was hit. “Are you hurt?”
“No, I’m fine,” Ruby said.
And then she fainted.
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